Once there was a boy born in 2011 on December 5. His name was Almaan he was a good boy and he loved tys and he brang it to bed everyday. He loved to play ball and he played video games a lot like rocket league and Fortnite. When he got older he started to play soccer and he loved soccer. He was a very good player. When he was 13 he was still playing soccer and getting better. He went to play against very good players when he played for the national team in soccer he won some games and got money. When he got 18 He got a house and a car and other things.
When he was 20 he got a job and he got. His job was a professional soccer player and he was a kind man. He got to playing soccer and got to training hard and he got to do drills and he got 3 hours of training everyday he got a very good and he started playing Live matches and he got lots of money and was a very good soccer player
Almaan joined a team and got to play live matches with a team and he had lots of friend from his match he and he hoped all his hard work paid off and he got to have a great team that was kind and Smart Almaan got to become a midfielder and Scored more than 100 goals in his career. He was so excited for his other matches because it was a very good team’s and he lost some of them and won some of them but he didn’t give up and some of his other friends wanted to train with him and he did. He got so good with them and he was very good at Skilling defenders. A other team wanted him but he didn’t go to that team and he stayed in his team.
Almaan was driving and he saw robbers . He tried to help the police and he stopped one and the police stopped the other. Then when he went home to sleep, some of the robbers’ friends broke into his house and he died to the robber stabbing him with a knife.
6 replies on “The life of Almaan”
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This was a good blog but there was some detail missing. Ou shouldn’t have left us at a cliffhanger at the end and you should’ve detailed it. It also doesn’t make sense how he bought a car and a house before he got a job.
Almaan this is a good blog but you need to work on the order of the events.
Ok Ty for this mistake I’ve done. I will put them in order of events and make them make sense.
Feather 1. I really loved how you told a story about yourself.
Feather 2. I also liked that you used good structure.
Wings 3. I think you could add a bit of punctuation e.g ! “ , but it was really good
Ty for this information I will try add more punctuation to my writings.