Do you enjoy playing sports? Would you consider it entertaining? Or would you find it not that amusing. Well there are many sports you can play. Such as basketball, softball, touch, volleyball, cricket and many other sports. But for our main topic I will be encouraging you on why you should try out for netball. Although you may not be a very sporty person, or you may not think netball is your sport, you should still try your best even when you don’t like it. I will now be giving a variety of reasons on why you should try out for netball.
Firstly, it can be enjoyable. It’s kinda like basketball but you don’t dribble the ball, instead you use your teammates by passing the ball to them. This can also have a result of being less tired compared to basketball. Additionally you might get tired of doing the same position over and over again, but you do not have to worry as there are other types of positions you can play! If you’re good at defence, the positions that include the most defence are wing defence, goal defence, and goalkeeper. The next position is centre, you mostly run around the court back and forth helping their teammates. Lastly for our positions, if you enjoy shooting from basketball or any other sport that includes a hoop, the positions you would probably enjoy the most is either goal shooter or goal attack.Now that I have showed you several options of positions you can play, there are still some things we need to cover up.
After introducing the positions you can play, I will be giving a couple of reasons on what would happen if you tried out for netball. First of all, after playing for a few days, you will start to gain more strength in your upper body. When you play netball, it can boost your physiological well being and can improve your self esteem and your confidence in sports such as netball. It can also be quite refreshing to just go outside and get some exercise. However in my opinion, if you kept playing netball you would gain a lot of strength in your body! I would really like to encourage you to play netball as it is a really enjoyable and amusing sport!
I liked how you added a lot of detail into your story it was really enjoyable to read. Also you put them into basic paragraphs. Good job
I liked how u used paragraphs the right way by changing the topic or scene or time
I liked how you added a lot of detail into your story it was really enjoyable to read. Also you can next time do is try to have not basic paragraphs but anyways good job.
I really liked your writing and the way you talked about the Positions.
I like you writing and how you explained the positions. It would convince me to try out for netball.
Good job explaining the rules of netball. You also did a good job at explaining positions and etc. if you could add more rules like the three thirds rule that goes like a goalkeeper can only go in the first third and etc. Good job persuading!
I could tell that this piece of writing was to persuade. You really included cause and effect relationships for netball and basketball which shows the main purpose of the text.At the end you summarised the ending by restating your introduction which really hooked me to keep reading and wanting to research more about netball.
One thing you could work on next time is to not just talk about the differences between netball and basket ball. Try talk about many different things as you are trying to talk about netball, not basketball.
Great writing Chanel!I love how you’ve sectioned your writing into paragraphs based on the topic. You are very convincing!
Hi Chanel
This is a very well put-out structural piece. You’ve included an ending paragraph, summing up everything you’ve stated, and it was in a logical sequence. Also, there’s a use of pronouns, like you and I. There’s not really anything you should work on, as this did persuade me into playing. Good job!
I liked how you talked about each position and gave ideas on which one you should choose if you were to play netball.
I also liked how you put benefits for if you went to try out for netball or if you already play netball!
Overall your writing is very nice but it wasn’t that persuasive if I’m honest.