Oh what a starry night,
the sun had sunk below the horizon and
the day was over,
You sat outside glancing at the night sky.
The breeze blowing through your hair,
you had so much work to do but you just didn’t care.
Oh what a starry night,
the moon was burning bright,
the stars looked so delight,
oh what a wonderful sight.
a shooting star cut across the sky,
blazing bright it caught your eye.
Upon that star lay a million and one wishes waiting to become true,
you added to that making it a million and 2.
Oh what a starry night.
Wow, you used a lot of describing words, I could feel how amazing it is to be outside on a starry night. I could even hear some awesome rhymes in it. Maybe next time you could work on punctuation because I saw that there was a lower case letter at the beginning of one sentence and you can also improve on using come binding words ( like and, so ) so that you don’t have to use a lot of comma’s. Great story though!
– Vishaka
I actually love this piece, it so creative and I can just imagine a image of the scene. I like how you used repetition. The only thing bad I could find was that you missed 1 capital letter. But overall amazing work!
It’s rhymes which is good because this is a poem.
I like that it’s quite large for being a poem and when it started it didn’t let me be bored.
It could have been broken down into smaller pieces and an excellent piece.
Great poem, I like how you used repetition. Its nice how you lots of detail. Maybe next time add a bit more detail.
This is an amazing poem, I liked how you added strong words to describe & it was very intriguing. I cannot think of anything you need to work on but it is very good.
Great poem Danae! It feels almost as if I am in the story, staring at the night sky! ☺️
Wow this was so good and it had story it felt professional. There was nothing wrong with it.
It was out of this world. I can feel myself looking at the stars. I enjoyed reading it, maybe use conjunction words to your poem.
Feather: this is so engaging and set out so well.
Feather: I really love the rhyming scheme, stanzas, and the descriptive words used in this poem. This isn’t just a poem, it’s a story!
Wings: I think it’d be better if you lengthened the story, I was captivated by it.
I really liked your poem because captivates so much and painted a picture in my mind of how it looked like. The only bad thing I found was when you said the stars looked so delight which doesn’t make sense.
Hello Danae I would like to say that you wrote a good poem which
consists of good rhymes . Next time you could use punctuations because I saw some missing Capital letters missing .