When I was at school me and my class was getting ready for the bus to come because we was going swimming because we get to go there for free!because some paid it for us and that person was John Walker. He was one of the fastest runners for New Zealand 2 years ago. He wanted school kids to do swimming lessons for free so he and some other people put their money in and let us go to swimming lessons for free.
When we went to manurewa leisure center. We had to go to the bathroom to get change. When we all got changed we had to wait for the coach to tell us to get in the water. when we got in the water we had to go in a line I didn’t know what was happening until I soor people had to race I got excited because I wanted to vs some one it took for ages for to get in front of the line when I was in the line I soor mr wrong other teacher who came with us taking a photo I was wondering what’s he doing with that camera when I was think I forgot about the line so I quickly run to top of the line before. You know it I’m all ready in front of the line I was ready to go when I go I soor the aver person going faster than me but when I went to the finish I got put into group 1 and the aver person group 2 I was yea in my mind oh yes how they decide which group you in they see what do you need to prove on.
When I was in group one we did a race again it was the same race as the first race
I got angry because I didn’t want to do the race again but I did it anyway after that the person teach us different kicking tack necks when he made use go to the wall and hold on to the railing I was doing my kicking what i did in the race when the teach moved my leg to do it this way it felt weird but I feel faster but once we done with that we did the race again I was ready since I learned how to swimming faster because of that person when we go I went faster than before then I bettered the. Person who was versing me I Was so happy because I atchaly beated someone in swimming. Then we were finish of that then we had to do a running race then I came in 3 or 4 place I think I don’t really know then we use the had bord we also did a race with that which was realy easy and kinda hard then we was done.
When we came to the swimming pools, I got on to a van it was the same as the bus but cooler we also got a new bus driver when everyone was yelling he didn’t care but I made everyone quiet because I went to sleep but when we came back from swimming everyone was screaming and talking I couldn’t hear myself talking
Then the bus driver stopped and grounded us but I was like but it wasn’t me it was everyone else.
Wow that is a lot of writing for 40 minutes Ethan, well done! When you are proof reading make sure you include capital letters for proper nouns e.g., Mr Wong, Manurewa Leisure Centre. Also I noticed you spent ‘saw’ (soor) wrong several times, try to learn that one as you use it lots in your writing.