My cross country was insane let me explain! First when we got there me and my friends has a little snack miss Watson was announcing the first race that’s the year 4 girls. Then we were watching the race, after more races we had our launch but I didn’t want eat to much because my race was next I had a big drink of water and then I heard “year 7 girls please head over to mrs. Dismyer” so I got up ran over we all did a little warm up and then we went to the starting line.Mrs. Dismyer clapped the wood and headed of but I have the worst luck ever and I fell over on my face but I didn’t want to give up so I continued I started to cry but I kept on running I made it to the almost end of the race but some lady had her dog without a leash, I have a phobia of dogs so I stood there as a statue but the dog came closer so I ran as fast as I could the dog chased me everywhere I was screaming so loudly but the lady just stood there watching! Finally two teachers came and told her to go I couldn’t finish the race but definitely had a crazy day!
– Harleen Kaur
15 replies on “My crazy Cross country!”
Hi Harleen, I really enjoyed reading about your funny and crazy day at Cross Country. One of the amazing things I liked was how you told your day in order and used words like then, after and before. One thing you could do was tell me more about what you did after you couldn’t finish your race. But overall it is an amazing piece of writing.
Oh no Harleen! You must have had a very adventurous run! Try and use more punctuation and remember to put commas and full stops.
Oh no, Harleen! You must have had a very adventurous run! Try and use more punctuation and detail.
Wow Harleen that’s a really crazy story I love it
I missed cross country, but this really helped! 😋
Really helped!
That was truly a chaotic day! I am glad you are fine love how you have hooked the readers in by using descriptive words and a great use of punctuation but remember your capital letters!
Sounds like you had a amazing cross country
Fantastic that was amazing but a bit sad to I hope you’re okay. I also really like how you told how it went on. so keep up the great story’s
Oh no Harleen! You must have had a very adventurous run! Try and add more detail in your writing and use a variety of punctuation and vocabulary.
thank u jazz for he feed back!
I really like your story it must have been a very chaotic day for you.
Your story was great but maybe next time you can add how you felt when you fell or got chased by a dog or maybe just at the end of cross country.
I was also wondering did you have fun?
Once again I love your story
Hi Harleen, I loved the story you shared about cross country it had amazing detail in it but maybe next time try adding more punctuation to your writing.
Thanks reha for the feedback and i will make sure
Hey Harleen amazing blog of your cross country experience