We went to the puhinui stream
Then one of the girls just randomly screamed
Maybe because they saw something in the water
But I tried so hard not to bother
We went on with our day
I was standing on the bay
Collecting water samples
When we got back to school
We saw a puddle that looked like a pool
Turns out it was raining
And my leg was paining
Maybe because we were walking a lot
But I tried not to think about a lot
Then I looked down at my shoes
And I had to tie a knot
I went on with my day
And a voice shouted โHey!
The Puhinui stream poem
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Wow Joel. Amazing poem. Amazing details it made me paint a perfect in my mind about the scenario.
Yeah it was so fun
Itโs really goood but you should add more full stops!
WOW! I like the way you have used the most words you could find to rhyme with your poem. Keep up the good work!
WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW THIS IS PHENOMENALLY CRAZILY AMAZINGLY GOOD. YOU PAINTED A PICTURE IN MY MIND LIKE VINCENT VAN GOGH. ๐ฃ๐ฆ๐ท๐๐ปโโ๏ธ๐ฆ๐๐ฉโ๐ฆฒโค๏ธโ๐ฅ๐ซ๐ถ๏ธ๐งฃ๐ท๐ฉโ๐ฆฒ๐คฃ๐๐ก๐ต๐ถโ๐ซ๏ธ๐ฆ๐จ๐คฏ๐คฏ๐คฏ๐คฏ๐คฏ๐๐๐๐๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐คฉ๐๐ฏ๐ฎ๐คฏ๐ฎ
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Excellent job Joel! This definitely intermediate work!