With circular craters in the water,
Being there just makes you warmer.
The puhinui sings its own song,
dancing and flowing singing along.
The streams graceful elegant chorus,
The water and nature just seems enormous.
The peace the scenes just let it fade,
No thoughts no worries just create.
Hi Lara! I like how you added the personification (Puhinui singing it song) into your poem; and how the whole poem is relaxing. One thing you could change is the ‘p’ in Puhinui since it’s a name. Good job overall!
Thanks for reminding me about capital letters in names Darlene.
Thanks for reminding me about capital letters in names of places and thank you for your compliments on my piece.
Great poem Lara! I like the way it all rhymes and as Darlene said the use of personification! Make sure to check your capital letters.