In the depths of darkness, night unfurls its cloak,
Revealing a canvas adorned with celestial stroke.
A tapestry of wonder, a jewel-lit sky,
Above us all, constellations sparkle up high.
Each glimmering jewel, a radiant star,
Etching tales of beauty in realms afar.
Their twinkling dance, a symphony of light,
Guiding lost souls through the velvet night.
The moon, a guardian, casting its gentle glow,
Bathing the world in an ethereal show.
A spotlight, illuminating a pitch black page,
As constellations, tell stories of ancient age.
The Mātariki constellation, full of 9 sisters,
This constellation represents Māori new year with its tale full of new beginnings and twisters.
Pōhutukawa, a star full of love for the ones who have passed,
As their souls leave the earth and rise up in the heavens at last.
Tupuānuku, helps us grow crops on the ground,
Where all the winter vegetables can be found.
Tupuārangi, is connected to all the soaring creatures in the sky,
And also provides us with berries and elevated kai.
Waitī connects us with our rivers, lakes and streams,
And all the fresh water that makes all our awa gleam.
Waitā, the twin of Waitī looks after salt water lakes,
And all the salt water creatures, like our fish, with the shiniest of flakes.
Waipuna-ā-rangi, waters our crops with her rain,
So thank her when you see a blossomed flower across the terrain.
Ururangi, is the reason there is wind in the sky,
And helps all the birds glide, flutter and fly.
Hiwai-i-te-rāngi, to Māori was their fixing magician,
Who they would tell all their problems and New Years Resolutions.
And finally Mātariki, the eldest of them all,
She means health, and well-being while looking after us during summer, winter, spring and fall.
really nice poem really coulerfull
you need to improve on adverbs
I like how you include what the matariki stars were named. And I liked how you included what the meaning behind the names were. I can’t really find anything wrong. So Ka pai!
I like how you made it rhyme and how it’s broken down like a poem.
I like the topic you picked I read the whole thing without getting bored so good job by keeping the reader interested.
I think it could be longer but it was all around really good.
Wow your writing is amazing!!! I like how you’ve described to us about everything you’ve included in this writing. Good job 👍
Hi Pearl you did such a great job with your writing I liked how much detail you have put into it and the amount of describing words are put in too, I think you could work on telling us more about the characters but after that you did really good keep it up.
Congratulations Pearl – your writing was submitted as one of our hapori pieces for the TGS writing competition!
it was really good
Hey pearl I like how you made it rhyme and how it’s broken down like a poem. I like the topic you picked I read the whole thing without getting bored so good job by keeping the reader interested. I think it could be longer but it was all around really good.
Wow, your writing is impressive Pearl! I like all the rhyming words you used because most of them weren’t just ordinary words as you used celestial stoke, constellations, elevated and more.
I know this is meant to be feedback but I’m not sure what you can work on since your poems are truly amazing so all I can say is keep it up 🙂
Your poem rhymes perfectly!
You didn’t use any boring and simple words in your poem.
This is to the highest standard so I don’t think you will need to work on anything for your next poem! Good mahi.