In week 2 of term 3 my peers that qualified to go to inter school cross country went to totara park to compete against other schools to have the title of some of the fastest runners in Auckland but first they had to compete in 3 different tournaments. First was inter school cross country then was counties cross country then was Auckland champs xc.
On Friday of week 2 Term 3 we headed to the race track to start our race but before the year 7 boys was the year 7 girls so we had to wait for them to start but after 5 minutes we could start our race, we had to warm up as soon as they left but when our time came we were ready to win, the track was muddy but me and my peers had a strategy to keep a steady running pace. We went up steep hills and rough terrain but we prevailed.
After about 9 or 10 minutes we finished our race. We had done so well that the team made it to counties cross country. Counties cross country is the 2nd toughest tournament and after that is Auckland champs.
On Friday of week 4 term 3 we had to drive our way to the track. It was really muddy and we were quite hesitant but we had to do this for our teammates that didn’t come from injuries.
When the race began our hearts were racing and we were very nervous, when we heard the whistle we ran as fast as we could we went up the hill down the vineyard and out the other side for a flat track to run for the second 2 to complete the 3 kilometre race.
We didn’t end up winning but it was sure of a good race we had fun and it was an accomplishment for most of us and we were so proud to even get there we enjoyed ourselves and we hope to get there next year
I like it how you talked about boys & girl but over all it was a nice writing
You did really well by adding steps making it easier to read
Next time maybe think about making the sentences slower and adding more breaks and think more about linking paragraphs together
really nice hard work good job
you need to work on your punceation
Hi Raihaan your blog was very descriptive stating your topic and your ideas and you used a variety of vocabulary . Next time you could work on your punctuation because I saw some missing commas in that writing , but other than that amazing writing and good job. 🙂
Reading this it shows how you love sports and how sporty you can be getting into heaps of sports altogether. Reading this it also shows how enthusiastic you are about showing people that you are a sports lover
Excellent use of words
Well done for using paragraphs
Maybe put commas somewhere across the paragraphs
I really like your blog, because it’s very interesting and how you have explained how the track was. Next time tell us more about your story.
This blog that you have done describes your experience of Cross Country from your prespective which gives us your point of view to look at.
-Pearl
I like how you included verbs and past tense words to show it was a recount.
I like how you tried to use words to create intensity in the writing.
I think you could use more detailed vocabulary but overall it great!
Well done on your amazing blog!
-I like how you explained what you were doing in the introduction.
-Its cool how you put your writing in clear paragraphs.
– Maybe next time make your paragraphs longer with more sentences so it has more detail.
I enjoy how you talked about what you did but made it fun to read while adding fancy words and overall making very interesting re-count
Great work Raihaan! I see that u really put some effort into this blog and this blog was really interesting.
It was really good but should have more Punctuation