The cold breeze was in the air
Two little mushrooms sitting near
The mushroom hat was as red as a tomato
Her little mushroom companions were couch potatoes.
The trees as long as a snake sitting near
A long loud laughter was in the air.
The two companions thought the book was endless
The long morning was defenceless.
The birds were chirping in the air
Then there was a loud BANG! It was a bear.
The flowers are listening as the mushroom were taking
The tiny little bear slowly came walking.
*This is not my picture *
*Here is we’re I got the picture from *
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This poem is so cute Riya! I love the figurative speech you have added. Try and add some more punctuation.
Jaslyn I totally agree with you! I love this cute poem as well and I think Riya should put more punctuation but everything is still great!
Thank you !
Thank you for the feedback Jaslyn , and I’ll work on my punctuation !
Hi Riya! This a very cute poem! I love the figurative language you have given. Maybe next time double check your rhyming.
I think you should put more vocabulary words but still great!
Thanks for the feed back Mina I’ll work on my vocabulary!
Nice poem Riya, you did a good job in using your onomatopoeia but next time you could make your sentences a bit more descriptive and expand them as well.