Kindness
Once upon a time there was an old man with a sick daughter in the hospital
ha was very poor he had to sell lots of stuff to try and pay up da doctor for the medicine such as his car furnitures and worked 20 hours a day only getting 10 dollars
One day he went the mall and mrought a lottery ticket he then walked home but he had lost it
Leather on in the evening a man named Ryan knocked on the door and said your lorry ticket fell .so he gave it back and the man gave him his number
Later on he scratch the ticket and there was 3 cherries he had won 1 billlion dollars he than came to Ryan house and gave him 500m and thanked him.
He went to the hospital and paid the 1 million money now his daughter was better he was a millionaire.p
It turned out ryan had a son and his daughter and Ryan son fell madley in love with with each other .
Now it was there wedding they had a
Dj music and cake then it had started Ryan JR will you take olivia hand olivia will you take Ryan Jr hand yes they said
You may kiss the bride
After a while that had a son and a daughter.
This story is very good and funny but the only thing that was wrong was that you spelt some words wrong but that’s the only thing you did wrong but good job Ryan
maybe make a longer paragraph. Some words are spelt wrong. Very good though
-Alex