Tree planting
Have you ever done tree planting? Well some of us went to kimber road in Bombay to do tree planting on Wednesday 10th of August . Jocelyn, Mark and their dog Rosie owned the farm. At 9:00 am we got on the bus and went there. It was a 35-40 mins drive. On the bus it was kinda boring but not that much. We were all excited to plant there.
When we arrived we all saw a dog named Rosie. We were all excited and patted it. Then Linzi from Trees for Survival told us all the instructions. We also had a little snack before we went on the farm and planted. It was a short walk to the farm and when we got there we got to work. We dug holes and planted lots of trees. At the end we planted six hundred native trees. When we ended we had a little rest and we noticed the hills view cows so much more.
Then we walked back to the shed. We cleaned our hands and the spades. Then we had the biggest lunch ever there was: samosas,sausages of all kinds, hash brown,nuggets, buns,wraps,eggs,Nutella sandwiches, fruits,marshmallows, cake, lamingtons, icing slabs, raro,milo and lots more. It was probably the best lunch I ever had in my whole life.
The reason that we all did this all was for survival like oxygen and to stop the erosion. We all had the best day ever. That day was amazing.
I like your writing and I liked how you put lots of detail in your writing. While I was reading you made me hungry with all the yummy food I think you could have put a little more in the end. Good job
Thanks, will do.
This writing was very good you just need to put more punctuation
Wow great job Sahibjot! I really liked your story and how you included everything that happened, I did notice that you missed the capital letter in the first sentence, but other then that I really like your writing.
Ok i will remember next time, thanks for the feedback