Have you ever been to a school swimming lesson, well I had my first one this year on Wednesday 3 August. When we got on the bus I was glad to see that it was a different driver, because last time she was really grumpy. Anyways, when we got there we got changed into are togs, and went to the pool. When we got there we had to do a thing called “safety entry”, when we got into the pool.
After we all got in the pool they got us to line up against the wall, after that we swam the length of the pool. Then they gave us our groups, and put us in our lanes. Luckily, I got one of my friends in my lane.
After that we did some swimming drills, my favourite was one where we stayed at the bottom of the pool doing breaststroke. There was another one where we swam normally but encouraged us to breathe by lifting our head up the side.
Overall I enjoyed swimming, although there was a bit of confusion with towels and goggles. It was a lot of fun.
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Thank you for sharing, Tom! I like how you put so many details in your writing and tried to use interesting punctuation. You can remove the “well” in the first paragraph and “The End” at the end. At the end of the first sentence, there should be a question mark rather than a comma. Good job.
This is a great way for me to learn about what you get up to at school! I agree with Mr. Wong’s comments about the question mark and the ‘well’ in your first sentence but I love the conversational tone of your work. Keep it up!